Why your fundraising ask isn't landing


Hey Reader,

Does this sound familiar: You sit down to make a call to a donor, or write an email or grant narrative. You try to sound professional, grateful, maybe even a little urgent. But when it’s time to make the ask… it just feels off.

Here’s a typical example I see all the time:

“Hi Sarah, I hope you're doing well! I wanted to let you know we're raising money for our program again this year and really need your support. Any amount would help. Let me know if you’d be willing to donate. Thanks so much!”

Let’s break it down:

  1. It’s vague - There’s no clarity on what the donor’s gift would do. “Our program” could mean anything. There’s no context, no specifics, and no clear reason to act. Similarly, what you're asking for is also vague.
  2. It centers the nonprofit’s need, not the donor’s impact - “We really need your support” is about the organization. Donors want to solve a problem they care about—not just fund your budget.
  3. It sounds a little… desperate - “Any amount would help” lacks confidence and feels like a throwaway line. It gives the donor no direction, and it undersells the importance of their role. It's also the best way to get a very small donation!

Now, let’s rewrite that ask with purpose and clarity:

“Hi Sarah—thank you again for being part of our mission to create safe, supportive spaces for teen girls. This fall, we have 42 students on our program waitlist. A gift of $______ would cover mentorship and materials for two girls for the full semester. Would you consider making that possible?”

Here’s what this version does differently:

  • It connects the donor to a specific outcome
  • It inspires by naming a clear, reasonable amount tied to real impact
  • It shows confidence, not apology
  • It asks a question - which increases the likelihood of a response!

Not sure how to apply this to your organization? Hit reply and tell me what you're stuck on—I read and respond to every message!

Cheers,
Kay

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Kay @ NonProfit Life

I teach nonprofit professionals - over 5,000 and counting! - how to grow their organizations with practical, action-oriented templates and tools. From event sponsorship packages, grant proposals, board orientation handbooks, and everything in between, I focus on helping you save time, effort and precious resources. As a Certified Fund Raising Executive (CFRE), I've raised 25 million+ for other organizations, and now my passion is to help you do the same for yours. Join the weekly newsletter to get time saving tips, tricks and action plans you can implement today to accelerate your nonprofit.

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